The Mansion~ [Discussion]

Sometimes I'm not even sure of what to do, so I'll ask you guys here. n_n I'd also appreciate some C&C or suggestions!

K, your story has drawn me in, I'm really intrigued as to how it's going to evolve, keep up the great work, seriously

Zeee suspenz eez keelling mee. Srsly

I wet myself. (No, kidding.) But VERY NICE. The plot development was awesome, and Lelouch's character was hilarious. Eiji made me laugh with, "Google." And when he went up missing, I thought, "Haha, that's what you get...." Kidding, but I really liked the story.

Bemcint wrote:I wet myself. (No, kidding.) But VERY NICE. The plot development was awesome, and Lelouch's character was hilarious. Eiji made me laugh with, "Google." And when he went up missing, I thought, "Haha, that's what you get...." Kidding, but I really liked the story.

ditto ^_^ ha ha... "Lelouke! You voyeur!" ._.

I'm such a goner.. I'm not in the bathroom!? Damion you found me to late.. Actually I think.. You took your time looking for me on purpose. XDDDDDDDDDDDD

Eijin-Suzaku wrote:I'm such a goner.. I'm not in the bathroom!? Damion you found me to late.. Actually I think.. You took your time looking for me on purpose. XDDDDDDDDDDDD

Agreed, Damion so would have done that xD

GAH SO EXCITING.I really love how it just leaves you thinking about your next move *fan girl squee*

(Kiss Me)Aki(Kill Me) wrote:*fan girl squee*

-ears explode and blood pours out- yes... I am very excited... I am filled with suspence towards this story... (seriously, I am, but I am in too much pain to express it thoroughly...)

Seriously. The Fan Girls and Boys are going to kill me. I have Kai as my roommate. I'm lucky C_C

Kenji Saioji wrote:Seriously. The Fan Girls and Boys are going to kill me. I have Kai as my roommate. I'm lucky C_C

Exactly. When you sleep, all the girls are going to kill you because you get to be in Kai's room. >_>

But thanks for the supportive comments guys! I'm glad to finally get my story progressing. I know the chapters are very small, but I prefer to write small chapters very often than huge ones every few days. But if you guys would prefer that, please tell me!

I like the small chapters.Leaves more things for your mind to create itself

I have to say, this is going to be a great story K, nothing better than a good murder mystery... -talks while cleaning blood out of his ears-

Guys, question- please be honest.
Do you think the drawings enhance how you picture the story, or just bug you?

I like em, myself. I'm good at visualising what I read, but it's always better to see it the way the author meant it.

I think the drawing are... oh god, what is a synonym for "good" that will fit with this?...

Ah, ite, this story keeps me on the edge of my seat. Very entertaining. One of these days, the writers of DNO should publish a book of short stories and split the profits, ne?

Hm. I think I'm progressing alright but is there anything you guys wanna see? Like certain people dying, a certain type of death, a new element, etc? Anything I'm doing wrong feel free to point out too, thanks!

Kira wrote:Hm. I think I'm progressing alright but is there anything you guys wanna see? Like certain people dying, a certain type of death, a new element, etc? Anything I'm doing wrong feel free to point out too, thanks!

I don't think you are doing anything wrong at all... but I did have some suggestions that would be somewhat unreasonable

Kira wrote:Hm. I think I'm progressing alright but is there anything you guys wanna see? Like certain people dying, a certain type of death, a new element, etc? Anything I'm doing wrong feel free to point out too, thanks!

I think you should add an epic plot twist

K, If you are right, I would be one of three people who like your story... so... I hope I'm not ._. It would be a big shame if you stopped writing it.

I'm one of those people who enjoy your story. It is very suspenseful and fun to read. I always wonder what will happen and the such. Keep it up!

Suspense all day.. Everyday.

Last chapter's up... tell me whatcha think!