Parasite Feedback

Well, everyone else is doing it, and since I've put out my first two chapters (almost 1000 words already, egad!), I figure I'll make one of these too.

All advice, constructive criticism and lavish praise is appreciated.

Damn, Chib, I'm gonna die, aren't I? xD I like the story thus far, it's got me hanging on the edge of my seat.

I'm considering bringing Parasite back, if that doesn't break any gravedigging rules. If so, I'll need a new(ish) cast, seeing as a fair few of the characters havn't appeared yet, and I've forgotten who the were going to be. If you're interested in seeing the story continue, or indeed being in it (and likely dieing), please say so.

I'd like to be in the story...So far its really good,though reminds me EXTREMELY of the game " Parasite " for Garry's Mod,where you tend to your needs while trying to find a parasite killing people on a spaceship,but you have modern ( as in OUR times ) weaponry.

If you were to include me into the story,hopefully in not a role that gets plastered on the wall,I have 2 characters,forever picked as my players,whom I always use in roleplays.

-Jerry Lofthton,The weak,young,but agile one

-Christopher H. Seren, The strong OLD one. ( about 32 )

Again,this gives me a fuzzy nostalgia feeling and I'm loving it so far.

Sounds like it's based on what I actually based it on.. a custom map for WCIII with the same objective.